Writing Sample 6

Plan

Orientation: Coach, Sam, Summers day, Dirtbikes.

Body: Course, Fear, Excitement, Bump, Dirt track.

Final Comment: As Sam is off the ground I say to myself “People are very good at sport and they are also brave. People also are very clever at the history of dirtbikes.

I’m ready to ride my dirtbike. I can see Sam riding his bike under the sun very calm and cool while his coach is cheering him on the sideline.

As he rides I start to panic because he has hit a bump. While he goes off the ground I can hear his coach on the sideline saying “Keep on going you can do it.” “I wonder if I can do that” I say to myself. “Whoa”. I can hear his bike going Broom!! Broom!!. While he is still in the air I say to myself “I wonder if he is feeling proud, sad, excited or scared.”

As Sam is off the ground I say to myself “People are very good at sport and they are also brave. People also are very clever at the history of dirtbikes.

Writing Sample 5

Plan

Orientation: Dusk, Marae, Tangata Whenua, Manuhiri, Powhiri.

Body: Powhiri, Speeches, Waharoa.

Final comment: As I look at the dusk sky I say to myself “A powhiri is very special to the Maori people because it is very respectful.”

“Where am I.” I look around to try and figure out where i am. Then I suddenly figure out I am at a marae and the sky is dusk.

Then I figure out I am one the Tangata Whenua. As I look at the Manuhiri I hear one of the Tangata Whenua say a speech. As I look at them I see them bowing their heads in respect for the ancestors of the Te Tahawai Marae. I wonder what the ancestors would think about the Manuhiri.

As I look at the dusk sky I say to myself “A powhiri is very special to the Maori people because it is very respectful.”

By Remuel

Sand Castle

Plan

Orientation: Sunny day, Uncle Ve’a and Me, Building sand castles, Having fun.

Body: Building Sand Castles, Wet sand, sea washing the sand of my feet, Hot sun.

Final Comment: Kids these days are very clever at using their imagination.

Orientation:

As I walk alongside the beach I can see the sun shining upon a little boy and my uncle Ve’a.

Body:

As they start to build the sand castle I can feel the nice clean water washing the wet sand of my feet. As they put the sand into the yellow the bucket I say to myself “ I hope the tide won’t wash away their sand castle when it come backs in”.

Final comment:

As I look at them building the sand castle I say to myself “Kids these days are very clever at using their imagination”. If they didn't use their imagination what would they do with it?

Writing Sample 3

Plan

Orientation: At school, Teacher and Student, Morning, Science. Body: Science, Teaching Jess, Experiment. Conclusion: Children these days are very smart and clever.

1 Its Tuesday and I am school in my science class. “Hello Jess and Jane” I say to them. “Hi Remy”.

2 As I go closer to them I can smell something. It smells like Gas and smoke. As I look at the experiment that they are working on I can see it starting to foam up. Then I start getting worried because it might explode everywhere. “Do you want to have a try at putting some liquid in to it Remy”. “Maybe”. As Jane gives the liquid to me my heart starts to beat fast. As I pour the liquid into the jug I start to calm down because nothing is happening its only foaming up.

3 As I pour the rest of the liquid in I say to the others “Children these days are very smart and clever and some are learning very fast.

Writing Sample 2

Plan

Orientation: Neighbours, Inside neighbours house, Playing outside, Afternoon, Homework, Helping Son do his Homework.

Body: Silky Green Couch, Thinking Seriously, Dusk Sky.

Conclusion: As I look at the beautiful dusk sky I wonder if Max will help his son with his homework or will he let him do it himself.

Its a nice warm afternoon and I am outside playing. As I am playing I hear someone say “Listen Carefully”. Suddenly I realise its the next door neighbours.

As I go to look through the window I feel the warmth of the Sun shining upon me. When I look through the window I see Max with his Father John sitting on a green silky couch. John is helping Max do his homework. “Nine times eight = what?” says John to Max. “It = 72” says Max. As John is explaining how you solve a maths problem I look at Max. While I was looking at Max he was listening carefully and seriously.

As I look at the beautiful dusk sky I wonder if Max will help his son with his homework or will he let him do it himself.

Writing Sample 1

Plan

Orientation: My uncle Ve’a and, my uncle Greg, Park, Afternoon, fresh air.

Body: Dusk sky, breeze, soccer career, famous, great player

Conclusion: Great and Famous soccer career, Fifa World Cup Fan

Its a nice warm day at the park. Suddenly i hear uncle Greg say to uncle Ve’a “Gee you are a great player”.

As I walk to try and find them I shiver because I feel the cold breeze brushing  against my face. As I get closer and closer I wonder why Greg said “Gee you are a great player”. Then I realise there talking about soccer. Finally I find them sitting on a bright orange bench under trees that look like trees in a jungle. “Hi Remy” says Greg. We are just talking about Ve’a if he wants to get a soccer career. “Who is your favourite soccer player”. “My Favourite soccer player is Lionel Messi”.”My favourite soccer player is Alexis Sanchez” I say to them. “Both of them are in Barcelona” says Ve’a.

As I look up at the fine dusk sky I say to myself “Gee I wonder if Ve’a will have a famous and great soccer career when he grows up or will he be normal person but a big soccer fan that goes to every Fifa World Cup”.

The Turtle and the shark

The Turtle and the Shark

Long ago there lived a lady and a man who where very much in love living on the island of Savai’i. One day the man was called away to attend a high chiefs meeting and the young lady decided to go with him. Instead they went to the island of Tutuila, American Samoa, where they stayed with some friendly villagers. After a time they knew that their disappearance would be noticed and therefore their lives together would be short lived. So they decided to give up their lives by jumping off a cliff in exchange for the lives of their families. The Gods took pity on them and they were changed into a Turtle and a Shark so that they can live for eternity.

My Prayer

MY PRAYER

Gracious God,

I can see the koru opening up under the bright Sun that you made Lord.

I can feel the nice prickly koru tickling me Lord.

I can smell the nice smell of the green Koru Lord.

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Diary Of A Wimpy Kid

Dog Days

Greg Heffley likes to spend his summer holidays inside play video games instead of going outside and using his imagination. Greg is an indoor person rather than an outside person. Greg is living a very nice summer holidays inside with no responsibilities and rules.

I recommend this book for people who like no responsibilities and rules who are aged eight and over.

 



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Diary Of A Wimpy Kid

The Last Straw

Greg Heffley's father Frank Heffley really thinks he can make his son toughen up. He tells Greg to enter a sports team. But of course Greg knows how to sidestep his father's plan to change him. But if he disobeys his father his father will send him to military school. So Greg now knows he has to choose one or another.

I recommend this book for ages eight and over that like decisions, threatens and tricks.

 

 



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Diary Of A Wimpy Kid

Rodrick Rules

Greg Heffley usually spends his summer holidays not talking. When Greg enters another new school year he is very eager to put the last three months behind him and one event especially. Sadly for Greg his older brother Rodrick knows all about the incident. Rodrick also has a way to get out of it especially when a diary is involved.
I recommend this book for hilarity, choices and rules that are aged eight and over.

 

 

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Diary Of A Wimpy Kid

Greg Heffley really hates being a kid. He is one of those kids who always get bullied by taller and meaner kids. Luckily he has his best friend always by him. But some how his beat friend Rowley is getting more popular and he is now starting to ignore Greg.

I recommend this  book for children who like cartoon books who are aged eight and over.